Wednesday, 10 September 2014

WALT: show not tell.

WILF
I will begin by describing what the characters body felt like.
I will describe what they were thinking
I will leave the audience hanging

Her heart was racing, her legs where wobbling, her teeth where rattling, her arms were fuled with goosebumps, her face went red like a apple,         
her lips were dry And purple as grapes, she  was biting her fingers,just amgen what will happen next……
What do you like about my writing ?





1 comment:

  1. Hi Jazzinda I think you should take some of the hers out and put a different word in like she.

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